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I have started writing poetry again

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And there she went,

 

Left, without saying even a single word.

 

In times before, I’ve seen it.

 

In times to come, I’ll see it.

 

She, and so many others,

 

Will come, and go.

 

 

 

Seeing me as the nice guy,

 

The helping hand.

 

Never though, do they see me,

 

As that other guy,

 

The romantic one,

 

The loving one,

 

The lonely one.

 

Waiting to be loved,

 

To be dreamed of,

 

To be waited for.

 

 

 

For the time to come,

 

I’ll walk this lonely road,

 

For it is most unlikely,

 

That she will be the one,

 

That loves me.

 

 

 

So I’ll keep walking along this lonely road,

 

Till either time,

 

Or loneliness,

 

Or live,

 

Have passed me by.

 

 

 

 

Any critique and comments are welcome.

 

Thanks in advance.

 

 

 

 

Cheers

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very nice man i dont know if u wrote it based on personal experience but i can sorta relate to this poem :)

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very nice man i dont know if u wrote it based on personal experience but i can sorta relate to this poem :)

 

Yes it was written out of personal experience.

 

Btw, I apologies for the rather crappy layout, I copy pasted it from word.

 

Cheers

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its all good i thought u did it on purpose XD cus u know people take diffrent approaches to the layout of there poetry

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Wow, I gotta say I liked it man, and I don't read poetry ever, haha. It had a good relation with things for myself. And I had no problem with the layout, I feel that poems shouldn't be written in just a fat block of text. But I liked how to set it up, and the relation to myself was nice, well kinda....Ha ANYWAYS it was a nice read.

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This bit of poetry is great.

Although the layout thing might have been a mistake, it, in my opinion, helped the flow of the text.

I understand the feelings behind it.

A good start for your new beginning in poetry. *thumbs up*

 

 

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I really liked it, and the layout actually really worked for it.

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